JOURNAL ENTRY 3
For everyone , university , graduate
from a universiy an important concept. Everyone wants to be succesful , wants
to go hight school and to go a good university is a part of everyone’s dreams.
In my opinion a university has to contain
some necessary faeture to be a good university. First off all I think good
universities have good and contemporary educators. They must improve themselves.
Also campus is important for me. Campus is just like students home because if
they staying in dormitory they spend almost all days in compus. Campus should
has greeen areas , trees , good and useful buildings. Also the student communities
in university is important. This communities should have free atmosphere. Students
in this communities should be open –minded. Educators and administrators should
give support this student communities.
Hi Seda,
YanıtlaSilI really like your ideas about an ideal university. They meer with mines. Campus life, success and prestige are important for me ,too. But there are some grammatical mistakes such as not 'graduate from an university but graduating from university because you use these as subject and there is no an auxiliary verb in his sentence. Moreover,the sentence ' Everyone wants to be succesful , wants to go hight school and to go a good university is a part of everyone’s dreams.' is also grammatically wrong as you can see after reading one more times :)
and not faeture but feature
not students home but students' home
not if they staying but if they are staying
not greeen but green
and in the sentence 'he student communities in university is important' the subject is plural so the auxiliary verb should be are not is.
in this sentence 'For students who come to university from out of the city accommodation is could be a big problem.' there is no subject.
Furthermore, not provide students enough dormitory but provide students with...
not if a university contain but if an university contains..
Consequently, not To study but studying :)
I think you should pay more attention to your grammar.
Thank you :)